WALT write a timed recount about a time
when we did something special with our whanau or family.
Write about:
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when and where you did something special
·
who was with you
·
what you did (think about the order you did things)
·
how you felt and why you felt this way.
By Jonathan Rapson
The Hill
One day I went to
a hill. It was big. I couldn’t believe it and me, mum and dad walked up the
hill. It was a long walk. We saw a fence. It said sheep. We opened the gate.
Sheep were everywhere. There was glowing green grass. It was soft and there was
poo so we kept on walking. We came to a beautiful hotel. We stayed there to
sleep. There they had cosy beds. They were coloured blue and green. The pillows
were coloured white, good for my head. In the morning I woke up. Mum said, “We
will be staying here for a couple more nights.”
“How many more?”
“Seven nights.”
Next
steps
You have used some good describing words in
your story.
Some of the shorter sentences could be
joined together using a connective e.g. We came to a beautiful hotel and
we stayed there to sleep.
There they had cosy beds that were
coloured blue and green.
