Term 1 2014 Written Language

WALT write a timed recount about a time when we did something special with our whanau or family.
Write about:
·      when and where you did something special
·      who was with you
·      what you did (think about the order you did things)
·      how you felt and why you felt this way.

By Jonathan Rapson
The Hill

One day I went to a hill. It was big. I couldn’t believe it and me, mum and dad walked up the hill. It was a long walk. We saw a fence. It said sheep. We opened the gate. Sheep were everywhere. There was glowing green grass. It was soft and there was poo so we kept on walking. We came to a beautiful hotel. We stayed there to sleep. There they had cosy beds. They were coloured blue and green. The pillows were coloured white, good for my head. In the morning I woke up. Mum said, “We will be staying here for a couple more nights.”
“How many more?”
“Seven nights.”

Next steps
You have used some good describing words in your story.
Some of the shorter sentences could be joined together using a connective e.g. We came to a beautiful hotel and we stayed there to sleep.

There they had cosy beds that were coloured blue and green.


WALT: use different painting techniques to paint a picture of a Lizard or Geko.

We will know we can do this when:
·      we can mix colours
·      use different colours to emphasise specific features/details
·      use different brush stroke techniques to create different effects

·      we can paint a background